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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I agree with the statement that
teachers
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 should not make their social or political
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 known to
students
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 in the classroom. In my opinion, school should be a place where
students
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 learn facts and feel free to form their own opinions without pressure from adults. First of all,
teachers
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 have a huge influence on
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. because of age and authority. Their opinions can affect how
students
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 think. When the teacher gives them any of him or her opinions, there is a big chance that the pupils will repeat
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 opinion. Not always
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 to politics. And of course, they aren’t right sometimes.
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, it can produce conflict with
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 and
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 , which will interfere with the process of education.
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, nowadays we have lots of different political
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 in society. So in my opinion, it is not really ethical to discuss political themes. Maybe discussion could be normal , but if
teachers
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 do not share their own interests with
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. They can disagree or agree , but when a teacher begins to humiliate or ridicule someone because of their own political or social
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, it is not good.
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, they should not avoid social or political topics. But be careful, because it could offend someone. In conclusion, I believe that
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 should keep their personal, social and political
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 private in the classroom.
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 approach supports independent thinking, respects diversity, and helps create a positive and fair learning environment for all
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structure
In Task response, make one main point in each paragraph and keep ideas clear.
content
Add more simple examples from school life to show your point.
grammar
Fix grammar and make each sentence clear and short.
coherence
Keep to a single view in the body and end with a clean, clear conclusion.
tone
The view is clear from the start.
structure
You give reasons for your view and end with a closing statement that repeats it.
language use
The essay is easy to read because you use simple words.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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