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Some people think that plastic shopping bags should be banned because they contribute to land and sea pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A substantial proportion of the population contends that
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 usage has become a pressing global concern and
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therefore
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 should be restricted to mitigate environmental degradation. I partially agree with
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 viewpoint, as
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 continues to offer significant economic benefits and practical convenience.
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, the improper disposal of
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 materials gives rise to a wide range of serious environmental challenges, which must be effectively regulated and controlled. On the one side,
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 is destroying nature at a fast pace.
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 is actually when the community use the
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 material for a single time and
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 it away without knowing its repercussions. The poly bags which are thrown get mixed into the soil and destroy the land.
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, the cans damage the water, which in turn becomes a major problem for biodiversity.
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, the news headlines evidence that in the famous "Sukhna lake", in Chandigarh, the fish and dolphins were declining
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 children's activity of throwing
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 wrappers and empty cans into the lake.
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, it ruined the beauty of that place. So banning these
plastic
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 items would be a good idea. On the other side,
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 is not bad if we use it properly.
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 containers and cutlery are quite cheap and accessible. The people can take advantage of it by using it again and again.
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, various things can be made from waste
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 material.
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, the reports show that in Ontario, Canada, the government opened the savage exhibition hall, where the population made picture hanging frames, decorative strings from
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 waste.
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, it enhances creativity
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 saves nature.
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,
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plastic
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 is really bad when people throw it in public places, which must be stopped by raising them
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 it is not that much
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 issue if used appropriately.

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task
Make your view clear in the intro and keep it throughout the essay. State your degree of agreement directly.
coherence
Use clear order. Use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' instead of 'on the one side' or 'on the other side'. Group ideas in separate paragraphs.
content
Give more specific examples and explain them. Tie your examples to your point.
structure
Clear attempt to discuss both sides and give a view.
example
Some real-world example is used, such as Sukhna lake.
structure
Conclusion restates the view and ends the essay.
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