the chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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a bar chart which illustrates
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the ageing
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population between 1985 and 2035. A glance
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at the graph reveals, Wales was the highest among the other countries.
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, England and
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the UK
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was
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the same in all of the years
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not only is
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point clear, but
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Scotland was higher than Northern Ireland. Notably, in 1985, Wales had
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the greatest number of elderly people, which was around 16%. England and
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came close
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which was 15%. Scotland
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was the
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and had around 14%. In the
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Northern Ireland had around 12%. In 2035, Wales is expected to have a significant rise
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older citizens
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26%. England and
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,
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having the same, will
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see the same amount of growth, both reaching around 23%. Scotland had a massive
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to
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25%. Northern Ireland had
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23%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ageing population
  • Demographics
  • Percentage
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Predictions
  • Proportion
  • Region/Regional
  • Statistics
  • Gradual change
  • Elderly
  • Life expectancy
  • Healthcare
  • Birth rate
  • Comparative analysis
  • Trend
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