IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Environment problems are too big for individual countries and individual person to address. In other words we have reached the stage where the only way to protect to environment is at an international level.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual persons to address
,
Punctuation problem
;
show examples
 the only way to protect the
environment
Use synonyms
 is at an international level. I completely disagree with
this
Linking Words
 statement, and I will explain my reasons in
this
Linking Words
 essay. First of all,
Caring
Fix capitalization
caring
show examples
 for the
environment
Use synonyms
 starts at home. I believe that parents work hard to raise their children with a sense of care for the planet.
For example
Linking Words
, teaching their kids to recycle or reuse and avoid the waste of resources
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 can make a huge difference in the behaviour of
this
Linking Words
 child who will become a responsible adult. Second of all, Environmental Laws or Policies in a neighbourhood, a city or a country should be followed in a strict way based on the needs of each group, which definitely improves the care for the
environment
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, the existence of a fine against people who don't compost will make a difference since everyone wants to avoid extra expenses.
Conversely
Linking Words
, International intervention in environmental problems won't be specific
according to
Linking Words
 each country, city or neighbourhood.
To sum up
Linking Words
, caring for the
environment
Use synonyms
 starts at home, and creating strict laws
according to
Linking Words
 their needs will
also
Linking Words
 improve the behaviour of society

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Show a clear plan in the essay. Start with a short line that says what you will argue. Then give 2 or 3 ideas that support your view. End with a short rule that restates your view.
coherence
Use a simple chain of ideas. Put your sentences in a clear order. Use words like 'first', 'next', 'then', 'in addition', 'however', 'for example'. Make sure each paragraph has one main idea.
task response
Clear stance is shown in the first paragraph.
coherence
You use sign words to show order (First, Second, Finally).
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: