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Some people believe that children should be taught financial skills at school. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that teaching young
people
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 life
skills
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 there are many
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 who think
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that
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 can learn financial
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 at home, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my view, I tend to agree with the former argument because I agree with the second
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 learning
money
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skills
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 at school helps
children
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 take responsibility and control their spending.
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 financial
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 at school helps them take responsibility for their
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.
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, if
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 manage their pocket
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, they learn how to make decisions. They
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 learn how to save
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 and plan their spending.
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 experience helps them be ready for
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 problems in the future. Another point is that learning financial
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 helps
children
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 control their spending. Some
people
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 think that
children
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 can learn
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 at home, but schools give better guidance.
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,
children
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 can learn to save for things they want
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 of spending
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 quickly.
This
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 helps them avoid wasting
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 and make better choices in the future. In conclusion, despite
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 having different views, I believe
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schools should teach
children
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 financial
skills
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.
This
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 helps them take responsibility for their
money
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 and control their spending.
Although
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 some
people
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 believe that
children
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 can learn
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 at home, school gives structured lessons and clear guidance.

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clarity
Be clear about your view. Say it in one simple sentence at the start.
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Give two clear reasons with simple examples and tie them to your view.
coherence
Use easy link words to join ideas, such as 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however'.
grammar
Check small grammar and keep sentences short.
content
The essay shows a real effort to make a case for school money skills.
content
There are real examples about saving and planning.
structure
The outline is clear: intro, two body parts, conclusion.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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