The diagram details the process of making smoked fish.

The given diagram illustrates how smoked is

prepered

Correct your spelling

prepared

and delivered to customers.

Overall

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, there are several sequential stages

Punctuation problem

;

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early phases include transportation and preparation,

while

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later steps comprise preservation and distribution.

Initially

Linking Words

fish

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are caught and carried by boats to the port. Having been frozen for some time,

fish

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are thawed in fresh water. In the next stage,

fish

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are cut so as to

withdraw

Verb problem

remove

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unnecessary body parts.After

being remained

Wrong verb form

remaining

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in salty and yellow coloured water, they are sent to be smoked. When smoked

fish

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are ready to

consume

Wrong verb form

be consumed

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, they are packaged in boxes. The boxes are kept in the freezer

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degree

Fix the agreement mistake

degrees

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. Before being distributed to

fish

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markets by trucks, they are preserved in cold stores for some time.

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Dec 14, 2025

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language

Fix many grammar errors and use plain form.

structure

Keep the steps in a clear order and use the same tense for all.

content

Add a short overall idea at the start and a final idea at the end.

language

Check spellings like prepared, smoked, degrees.

structure

There is a clear list of steps in order.

content

An overall idea is given.

content

The writing shows how fish go from catch to shop.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

121 words

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selection
high-quality
cleaned
prepared
smoking
brined
saltwater solution
preserve
flavor
texture
air-dried
moisture
smoker
wood chips
hickory
mesquite
impart
cooked
temperature
monitored
cooled
packaged
delicacy
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