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Band 3.5

There is a problem in the road outside your house. Write a letter to your local councilor. In your letter, introduce yourself, explain what the problem is, and tell the councilors what you would like to be done.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to bring your attention
towads
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to
 the road outside my side. I am Rupinder Kaur who
live
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lives
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in
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at
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 23 Bridgeway
drive
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Drive
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 in Brampton, and
post
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the postal
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 address of my house is L3R 3T4. Nowadays. I am confronting several problems
due to
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condition
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the condition
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 of the road. Because of
bad
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a bad
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 drainage system, water is usually logged on it during especially rainy days. Sometimes, the water comes inside the
house
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house,
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that
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which
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 creates
huge
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a huge
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 problem for me. I would
appricate
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appreciate
if
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it if
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 you improve the drainage system so we can live our lives without any hazards in any weather. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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Task response
Be sure to say what you want done and by when. Put this in one clear sentence.
Coherence and cohesion
Break the writing into clear ideas. Use a new paragraph for each idea. Use easy links like and, then, because.
structure
The letter has a proper greeting and closing.
content
The problem is stated with a simple fact about water.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Councilor – an elected representative for a local area who can address community problems.
  • Pothole – a depression or hollow in a road surface showing asphalt degradation.
  • Congestion – overcrowding or traffic blocking efficient movement.
  • Hazard – a danger or risk on the road that needs attention.
  • Resolution – a formal expression of intention or remedy to solve a particular issue.
  • Impact – the effect of a particular action or problem.
  • Community – the people living in an area collectively.
  • Urgency – the need for prompt attention to a pressing issue.
  • Remedy – a means of counteracting or eliminating something undesirable.
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