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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and Community become more isolated. discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that
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internet
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the internet
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 has become
one
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 of the essential
thing
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things
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in
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these days.
While
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 it may bring
people
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more
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apply
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closer
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closer,
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 it can
isolated
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 them.In
this
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essay
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 I will write about the advantages and disadvantages of
this
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 issue
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at the
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end
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end,
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 I am going to present my opinion. On the
one
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 hand ,
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internet
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the internet
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 can connect humans together
and
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, and
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 it can make them more touchable.To explain.
Due to
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 the needs of recent days,
people
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 may go
for
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far away from their
home
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.
Therefore
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 can connect these
people
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 with their families.
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.A father who works in another country can communicate with his family by using
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internet
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.
As a result
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 could be beneficial sometimes.
On the other hand
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.Other thinkers
sees
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see
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 that
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internet
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 makes
people
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 more isolated and far away from each other.
In other words
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,
while
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 a person sits with other
people
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 in
one
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 group and everyone plays with
his
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their
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 phone,
He
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they
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feels
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feel
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 that there is no connection between them.
For instance
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.A family consists of parents and their children sitting together in
one
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 room
but
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, but
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 all of them playing with
his
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their
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phone
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phones
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 without talking to each other
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. This
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this
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 makes them far away from each other
even
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, even
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 if they were in the same room.
To sum up
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.
This
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 issue will still
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be depatable
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depatable
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debatable
 forever
and
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 no
one
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 can state a clear opinion towards it. For me,I think that
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internet
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the internet
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 is essential
in
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apply
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nowadays
and
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, and
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 if
people
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 used it more
wisely
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wisely,
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 it may be good for them.

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structure
Plan the essay before you write. Use a short intro, two clear body parts, and a short ending.
coherence
Use linking words to show the order and the contrast (for example: also, but, however, so).
content
Give one or two clear examples and tell how they prove your point.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Make full sentences and use correct punctuation.
content
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
opinion
It gives a direct personal view at the end.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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