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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

The media should include more stories which report good news. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Reporting good
news
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 should be
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 in the
media
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. I agree with
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 opinion to a certain extent,
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 I think it is important for the
media
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 to maintain a balance between positive and negative
news
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.
By including
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 some stories which report good
news
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 might be beneficial for society.
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Nowadays,
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 many people are watching some stories,
such
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 as crime and war
which
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, which
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 can create stress and fear
and
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, and
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 it improves
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 their willingness to try these bad things. If the
media
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 shares encouraging stories like scientific achievements or the people who achieve the best results and
success
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success,
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 it could improve their public mood and improve their outlook in life.
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result
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 people may feel optimistic and motivated for their future.
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hand
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hand,
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 negative
news
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also
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 plays a vital role in informing the public about serious problems. Because in some
cases
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 the adverse
news
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 is engaging for the public. Because if the information is not interesting and the
media
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 focuses on just good
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news
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news,
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 it might be ignored In conclusion,
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 including more good
news
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 in the
media
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 can have a positive effect on people’s mental well-being.

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structure
Use clear topic sentence at the start of each paragraph to show the main idea.
grammar
Fix errors in grammar and use only simple and correct forms to avoid long, unclear sentences.
coherence
Use linking words like first, also, but, however, as a result to connect ideas smoothly.
examples
Give one or two clear examples that are easy to understand and connect them to your point.
content balance
The essay shows your view on both sides and not just one idea.
clarity
There is a clear main idea in the intro about 'good news in media'.
support
Some examples were used to support points.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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