The line graph below shows the avarage monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The report drives a line chart which illustrates the average
temperatures
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in
Paris
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,
Dubai
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and
Sydeny
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Sydney
.
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, it is clear from the chart that there are fluctuate in
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in these three cities. In detail,
Paris
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and
Dubai
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recorded the highest
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degree
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temperatures
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from July to August with 20
and35
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and 35
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degree
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respectively.
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,
Dubai
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have a higher level of
temperatures
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compared
whith
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with
Paris
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and
Sydeny
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Sydney
, which is the
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weather in
Dubai
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.
While
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Sydeny
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Sydney
recorded the highest
degree
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in
Jan
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with around 24
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degree
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degrees
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and falling the
degree
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to
reach
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apply
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14
in
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degrees in
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July
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then
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slightely
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slightly
back again to increase to
reach
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apply
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24
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degree
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degrees
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.
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, when we
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at the rest of
data
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the data
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, the remaining figures fall between the highest and lowest values.
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up
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we could say that
Paris
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have
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has
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a lower
dergree
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degree
in average
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and the maximum score
thet
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that
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it reach
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reach
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is 20
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degree
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degrees
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, oppsite
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oppsite
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opposite
of
Dubai
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to
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reach
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the highest level around 36

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, paris, dubai, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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