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The given bar graph illustrates the household count based on their yearly income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Overall, no dramatic fluctuations are apparent throughout the observed period.

The given bar graph illustrates the household count based on their yearly income in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
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, no dramatic fluctuations are apparent throughout the observed period. In 2007,
family
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families
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 with
income
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incomes
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 less than 25,000
dollar
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dollars
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 and interval 25,000 to 49,999 stood at 25 and about 27
respectively
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, respectively
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. Afterwards, both categories experienced a moderate growth
by
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of
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 around 4 in 2011, before roughly stagnating towards the final year. As for the interval 50,000 to 74,999 and 75,000 to 99,999, they relatively remained in
plateau
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 at 21 and approximately 15 between 2007 and 2015. Ultimately, after starting at just below 30 in 2007, the category 100,000 or more showed a slight decrease by 2 in 2001. At
last
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, it soared considerably and hit its peak of almost 35 in the final year.

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