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The table shows the amount of waste production in six countries in three different years.

The table illustrates the amount of waste outputs in six different countries in 1980, 1990, and
2000
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2000,
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 measured in
million
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 tonnes.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most nations showed an upward trend over the period. Notably, the United States
it
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apply
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remind
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remains
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 the highest amount of waste over
twenty-year
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a twenty-year
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 period. In 1980,
while
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 the amount of waste produced in the US had the highest figures around 131
million
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tons
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, Japan showed a moderate level
only
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of only
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 28
million
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tons
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,
whereas
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 Ireland had the lowest 0.6
million
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tons
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,
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;
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this
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these
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 figures
rise
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rose
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 to 5
million
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tons
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 in 2000. Meanwhile, Korea had no record
in
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apply
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this
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 year. Poland and Portugal,
on the other hand
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, increase gradually from 4 and 2
million
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tons
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 in the first year to 6.6 and 5
million
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tons
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 in
2000
Punctuation problem
2000,
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 respectively.
In contrast
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, Korea
decrease
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decreased
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 from 31
million
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tons
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 in 1990 to approximately 19
million
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tons
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 by 2000. The US
growth
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grew
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 significantly, peaking at 192
million
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tons
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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