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Some people belive that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era as all writings can be stored electronically. Others think that printed books still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is an ongoing debate about whether
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 required in
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e-books
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individuals
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 hold the notion that
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books
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 are still necessary.
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my opinion in
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Firstly
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, the main reason why printed
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 are less crucial is
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the availability of digital
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. To explain, the e-
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 are easy to carry. Individuals
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 who
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 to read
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 now read their favourite
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 and
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novels
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 anytime and anywhere.
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 is because
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everything
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advancement
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the advancement
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 in
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technology,
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 they
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can
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 study
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 travelling as well.
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, nowadays
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the majority
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 of youngsters prefer to learn from
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an electronic
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 as they study
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public and private transport because it is easy
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to
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donot
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do not
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 in their backpack.
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,
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 is the major reason behind
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 trend.
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, some
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 considered that
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 have their importance in
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society. Especially for adult and
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pupil
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pupils
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. They prefer to read from
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a paper
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 because they are not aware
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also
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, also
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 sometimes
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due
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, due
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 to the
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problems
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 of eyesight they can not be able to read small
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 from digital
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.
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, learning from
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books
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 is
beneficials
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beneficial
 as there is no distraction of
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notifications
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 from other sites. Individuals study and learn better from
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textbooks
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 as compared to electronic
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.
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, these are
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some
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factors
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 which are
consider
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 for the importance of
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books
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. In my opinion, both ways of reading
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 crucial in
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 contemporary era. Electronic
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saves
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save
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 money and learners
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can
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 read anywhere,
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 with
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have
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attached
 memories or feelings as well. In conclusion,
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 some
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 believe that
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digital
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 are beneficial
others
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, others
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 argue that printed
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 have their own importance. In my view, both are crucial for the development of
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 because young learners are
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 towards
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e-books
, but adults and
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older
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people
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 prefer
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the traditional
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 way of reading. Ultimately, a balanced approach is needed to ensure
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planning
Plan your essay. Make one paragraph for both views and one for your view. Start with a clear plan and keep one idea in one part.
content
Give full reasons for each view. Do not only state facts. Add more details and simple examples to back up your point.
cohesion
Link ideas with clear words. Use connect words like first, also, but, so. Make each paragraph have one main idea.
content
You show an attempt to discuss both sides.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
language
There are some real life examples used.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • book
  • read
  • print
  • paper
  • digital
  • store
  • power
  • easy
  • space
  • instant
  • search
  • library
  • school
  • study
  • plan
  • idea
  • view
  • point
  • reason
  • example
  • benefit
  • problem
  • balance
  • use
  • need
  • choice
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