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Band 4.5

Pollution and wastes are increasing everyday. What problems can these cause to the ordinary people? How can these problems be resolved?

As the
world
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 evolves, humans increasingly exploit and overuse the
world
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's resources. What's more, they produce more
waste
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 and
pullution
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pollution
 to the
world
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due to
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 various harmful human activities. In doing so, many
problems
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 can be caused by these detrimental issues.
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, numerous solutions will be provided to tackle these issues. Increasing
pollution
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 and
waste
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 can harm ordinary
people
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 in terms of health
problems
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 and lower quality of life. First of all, the obvious impact of
pollution
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to
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on
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people
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 is that they are prone to
breath
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 unclean air or toxic fumes
so
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 that many
people
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 risk having lung cancer or other related diseases. In
developing
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world
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, the death rate from respiratory diseases, asthma, and lung cancer is increasing every year because of air
pollution
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 or pm 2.5. In some cases, they suffer from chronic health conditions.
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,
people
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's quality of life is becoming degraded. The unpleasant smells, dirty streets, and noise
pollution
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 can lead to
the
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unhealthy living conditions. Urban residents experience stress, discomfort, or even mental fatigue, all of which come from less urban livability. To tackle the
problems
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, a wide variety of solutions have been proposed. Having more environmental initiatives can lessen the
problems
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 to
csome
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some
 extent.
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Government
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The government
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 of the country can promote to
environment-friendly
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friendly
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 approaches to the industries or private
organizations
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organisations
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.
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, they can be funded by
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government
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the government
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 if they can reduce the carbon emissions annually.
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, the
government
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 can enforce the laws regarding industrial emissions or
waste
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 collection. They can impose fines
to
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the
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law breakers
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 or taxes on polluters. In some serious cases, penalties must be applied. In conclusion, it is evident that there are considerable concerns
from
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 the increasing amount of
pollution
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 and
waste
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 to
people
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. As stated so far, the actions and regulations from
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government
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the government
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 can help mitigate the
problems
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 or find the compromising ways
to
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for
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 all related parties.

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Task Response
Make your view clear at the start and keep it through the essay. Give one main plan per body paragraph and add clear steps to fix the harm. Use simple, real examples that fit the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve how ideas fit together. Use one idea per paragraph and link them with small words like first, also, but, then, finally. Check the order: problem, effect, fix.
Task Response
You state both the problem and ideas to fix them. You give examples like air pollution and PM2.5.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear plan and a logic path from start to end. It uses linking words to move between ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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