The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The line chart illustrates the average monthly price change of Copper,
Nickel
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, and
Zinc
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during 2014. The unit of measure is
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per cent
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change in price compared with the previous month.
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, it is readily apparent that all categories
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plateaued
between July and September. In January, Copper accounted for 1 before rising considerably to 3 in the following month. It
then
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experienced a steady fall
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4 between February and June. Despite witnessing a slight increase from -1 to around -0.5 in July, Copper
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fell back again to -1
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before markedly
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to 2 in the
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period. As for the
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and
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, they
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stood at 2 and 6
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before
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the former was decreasing steadily by about 3, and the latter showed a dramatic plunge by approximately 6.5 between January to May.
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stagnated at about -0.5,
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continued to plummet and hit the trough at -3 in June. From that point onwards, both
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and
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rose considerably to 2 and 1
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in
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the final year

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, zinc with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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