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today, students can benefits from widers information through internet. some people think that tradition schooling disappear soon. Do you agree or disagree?

In today's world, a considerable number of pupils are relying more on information
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internet
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.
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, some believe that
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 schooling disappear soon. From my perspective, I completely agree with
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 various reasonable reasons. Far from integrating technology into a class, traditional methods of teaching include intensive
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research
 from textbooks or observations, which takes a
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 amount of time.
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 can allow
students
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 to participate or gain knowledge from hands-on experiences. The intervention of technology makes everything easier. The learning process of
students
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 interrupted by the speed and ease of the technology. Without the long enquiring process, children may learn and absorb less knowledge and innovation.
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, socialisation seems to be a huge part of the
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 schooling.
Searhing
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Searching
 information through the internet can prevent
students
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 from
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. Since they can browse anything online, they do not need more ideas from others.
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Compared
 to those in the past,
students
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 now spend much of their time searching
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for information
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 on the internet, which can lessen
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 skills to some extent. In conclusion, from my perspective,
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the conventional
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 pattern of schooling
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particially
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partially
 undermined
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because
 of technological disruptions in terms of the learning process and socialisation. To remedy the
sitution
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situation
, both
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approaches
 should be integrated into the classroom in order to
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 the
students
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' potential.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • benefit
  • information
  • traditional
  • schooling
  • disappear
  • agree
  • disagree
  • internet
  • flexible
  • personalized
  • structured
  • environment
  • interaction
  • social
  • skills
  • education
  • research
  • knowledge
  • profession
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • replace
  • learning
  • critical thinking
  • evaluate
  • sources
  • misinformation
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