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Band 8

Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing •describe your suitability for this area of work •say when you can attend an interview

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
I am writing
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 letter to express my deep interest in the Chef position in your restaurant. I worked in many restaurants in the past so I believe I am the right candidate for
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 position. Currently, I am working in the Lugi restaurant as a Chef Assistant,
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, I have improved my skills in Italian cooking, which is my favourite cuisine. It is important to mention that I am attending cooking school on weekends. It is crucial for me to develop my cooking skills. I truly believe I am a good candidate for
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 position, what's more in my opinion I will be able to improve a lot of recipes in your restaurant. As I mention before I have an experience with Italian cuisine but I
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 have knowledge of Spanish and Polish cuisine. I would appreciate it if I could attend an interview and I would like to provide,
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 details about myself and my experience. I am available every morning between eight to ten o'clock and on Friday afternoon between four and six o'clock. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need any
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 information. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Derek

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coherence cohesion
The logical structure is generally good, but it could be improved by better transitions between paragraphs and a clearer flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing that might interrupt the flow of reading.
task achievement
To score even higher, you could add a brief introduction about why you are interested in this specific restaurant or mention any unique qualities about it that attracted you to apply.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear and appropriate greeting and closing, which helps in making a good impression.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses one main idea, which keeps the information organized and easy to follow.
task achievement
The letter effectively answers all parts of the task, explaining your current activities, suitability for the job, and availability for an interview.
task achievement
The writing tone is professional and courteous, suitable for a job application.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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