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Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

To some people, in the coming
years
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 the environmental crisis will make our
planet
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 unsuitable for life.
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, human beings will be forced to move to another
planet
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 in order to save the population. In my opinion,
this
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 statement is partly correct, since the problem of environmental pollution
expends
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expands
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 every year.
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, I do not believe that humans will discover a
planet
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 in close proximity that satisfies vital needs. On the one hand, constant carbon emissions and air pollution amplify the global warming problem.
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,
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 global temperature increases over time.
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, water waste and pollution contribute to a lack of drinking water in the near future. At some point, the climate may change so dramatically that it could become impossible to continue living on Earth.
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, climate change can be observed in the recent fires in Australia.
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, even though scientists actively research different options to prevent human suffering caused by environmental issues, the idea of moving to another
planet
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 remains highly hypothetical. At the current stage of space travel, the most probable option is Mars;
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, radiation and atmospheric differences from Earth make it challenging to consider Mars a viable alternative to our home.
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, other potentially suitable planets for life are extremely far away;
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, it is very unlikely that humans will be able to travel there.
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, astronomers state that it would take decades to reach the closest
planet
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 with similar conditions to those of Earth. In conclusion, humanity is at high risk of causing irreversible changes to Earth’s atmosphere and environment that could become incompatible with life. Still, there
are
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 no evidence of the existence of a place in the universe within a reasonable distance that could become an alternative home for human beings.

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task response
Be very clear about your main view in the first paragraph and keep this view in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to show how each idea is linked, so the writing flows well.
task response
Give more specific examples and explain how they support your point.
grammar
Check grammar a lot, like verb form and noun use. Simple errors slow reading.
content
The essay shows a good idea of the topic and tries to weigh sides.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion that state the view clearly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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