The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The line graph shows the
number
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of old
shops
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that were shut down and the
number
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of new
shops
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that were started in a single country from 2011 to 2018
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Overall
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, the
number
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of new
outlet
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outlets
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opened
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significantly decreased in these seven years,
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those that were closed fluctuated drastically,
espeially
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especially
in the
year
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2015, where they dramatically reduced. A high
number
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of 8500 new stores were opened in the
year
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2018. By the
year
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2012, about only 4000 new workshops
opened
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had opened
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. The trend steadily increased to 6000
shops
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by 2014, to fall yet again to 4000 in the
consecutive
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following
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year
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. It
then
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stayed at the same
number
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untill
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until
2017, where it dropped by 1000.
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only
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, only
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reaching 3000 new
shops
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by the
year
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2018.
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. The trend followed by
closing
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the closing
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of retail
business
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businesses
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was more dramatic. 6300 stores closed in the
year
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2011, which
then
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fluctuated in the subsequent
year
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, reaching approximately 6200 by 2014. In
2016
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2016,
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it plunged vigorously, hitting a bottom of only 500 new workshops closing in 2016.
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the numbers were
then
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regained and
reched
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reached
5100 in one
year
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. It
then
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stayed stable by the end of 2018.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • open
  • opens
  • opened
  • opening
  • close
  • closes
  • closed
  • closures
  • rise
  • rises
  • rose
  • increase
  • increasing
  • growth
  • grow
  • decrease
  • decreasing
  • fall
  • falls
  • fell
  • decline
  • declines
  • gap
  • difference
  • pattern
  • trend
  • level
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • significant
  • slight
  • dramatic
  • peak
  • trough
  • period
  • year
  • over
  • between
  • by
  • in
  • for
  • as
  • while
  • whereas
  • however
  • but
  • on the other hand
  • compare
  • contrast
  • approximately
  • about
  • therefore
  • thus
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