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Some people think that hosting an international sporting event is beneficial for a country, while others disagree. Do the advantages of hosting a major sporting event outweigh its disadvantages?

There is an excellent impact of hosting an international sporting
event
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in
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a country
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country
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country's
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 economy.Some people think that hosting an international sporting
event
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 is a positive thing
in
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country
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a country
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, on
they
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the
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some
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, some
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 people think it is a negative for
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country
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the country
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. In
this
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essay
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 I will write about
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of hosting an international sporting
event
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. There
is
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 many
of
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advantages of hosting an international
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.First,hosting an international
event
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 is good for
economy
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the economy
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.
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example
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, during
events
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events,
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 all stores make sales. Second,
International
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an International
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event
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 makes
human
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humans
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 feel happy , active and helpful.
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example
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, player will support
their
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apply
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them
together
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together,
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this
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which
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 will make
theme
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them
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more happy
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happier
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.
Finally
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, hosting an international
event
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 in a
country
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make
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makes
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 the world like a small village.
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example
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, when all players came
form
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from
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 different
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country
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countries
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 in
a
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apply
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one
stadium
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stadium,
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this
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make
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makes
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 them in a small village. On
they
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the
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 other hand
hosting
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, hosting
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 an international
event
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 has some disadvantages.First,
It
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it
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make
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makes
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 the streets more traffic.
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example
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, when the
mach
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match
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starts
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start
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start,
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 all supporters will
going
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go
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 to
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the stadium
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stadium
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stadium,
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this
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which
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 will make all
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the street
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street
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streets
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 full .
Second,
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hosting an international
event
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lead
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leads
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 to noise .
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example
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, in
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event
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an event
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 there is
a
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apply
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fireworks and music
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this
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, this
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 will make a noise.
Finally
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, hosting an international
event
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lead
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 to
fight
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fights
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 and crimes .
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example
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, some supporters will be
more angry
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angrier
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for
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about
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the loser
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loser
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loser,
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this
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which
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 will lead to
fight
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a fight
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. In short , hosting an international
event
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 is a wonderful idea . I suggest, all countries
make
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hold
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a
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apply
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sporting events .
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Moreover
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, we must take care of the disadvantages of hosting an international
event
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planning
Plan first. Write an intro, two ideas, then a short conclusion.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Start with a clear sentence.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show order and add a cause and effect.
planning
Keep to one main idea per paragraph. Give a clear view in the end.
content
The text shows a view and tries to cover both sides.
language
Some examples are given and the topic is easy to see.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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