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The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.

The table shows the comparison of five fast food
consumption
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 in Melbourne from the year of 2005 to now and what it would be in the year of 2025.
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, most of the food
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is
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 increased from 2005 to the present, and it is expected to continue increasing or be maintained in the future. In detail, the most popular fast food was the hamburger, which was consumed 40
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 in 2005. It keeps its position with a slight drop in
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 to 38
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 at present. But it is predicted to rise to 51
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 in 2025. Meanwhile, there is a significant increase in the
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 of salad, which was only 5
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 in 2005, has become 15
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 in present, and it will become 41
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 in 2025. Fried chicken was eaten by 35
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 in 2005 , and there is no dramatic fluctuation in the amount of the consuming at present,
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 the amount is expected to increase to 45
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 in 2025. The other two fast foods, fried rice and noodles were maintained their proportions with slight increases , which both rose from 6
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 in 2005 to 9 or 8
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 at present,
as well as
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 the same amount in the year of 2025.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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