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the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the us by thier annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015

The chart illustrates the
number
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 of
families
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 in the US by their yearly
income
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 in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
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, in the whole three periods, the percentage of
the
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apply
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households
which their
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whose
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income
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were
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was
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 between 75,000 and 99,999 was always the lowest. In 2007, the
families
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 who had
annual
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an annual
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income
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less
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of less
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 than 25,000 made up a
number
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 of 25
million
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 ,but in
2011
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2011,
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 it rose by approximately 4
million
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. It didn’t change much in 2015.
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 the
number
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 of
families
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 who had
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income
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an income
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100,000
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of 100,000
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 or more slightly decreased in 2011,
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however
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apply
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 it rose by around 10 in 2015 to reach around 34
million
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. The households
who
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that
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 had
income
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 between 50,000 and 74,999 didn’t change much over the three periods
,
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;
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 it remained around 21
million
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.
While
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 the
families
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 who had
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income
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incomes
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less
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of less
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 than 49,999 and higher than 25,000 increased in 2011 to reach the
number
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 of 30
million
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,
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however
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apply
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it decreased slightly by around 2
million
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 in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, families, income, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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