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Some families have opted to teach their children at home. Why do you think this is? In your opinion, do you think that all children should be taught in a school environment? Say why you think home-schooling would not be a good idea and also point out some benefits for this chosen form of education.

There is no doubt that education is
one
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 of the essential things these days. Some people tend to teach their children at home ,
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 others think the opposite . These sayings depend on many related ideas.
This
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 on both sides. On the
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 hand. There are many
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 for parents to prefer teaching their sons and daughters at home.
One
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 of these
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 is that they may think that
school
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 subjects are not effective that much. To explain, these courses did not show any change in their children`s thinking or acting. Another reason is that they may not have much money to cover all the
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school`s
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 needs.
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, some poor families can not buy all their children`s needs for
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like
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 bags,pens,books, etc.
Therefore
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, these families prefer to teach their children at home
instead
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 of teaching them at
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.
On the other hand
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. There are a lot of
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 for thinkers to prefer
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school`s
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 teaching.
Firstly
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, they think that the
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school`s
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 environment is perfect for teaching. To explain, the
school
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 have classes and many places for the students to study, they may
also
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 make new friends. Another compelling reason is that they have a lot of knowledgeable teachers.
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, if the student wants to extra explanation, the teacher will give him another caption.
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This
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 issue will still be debatable forever , and nobody can state a clear opinion on it. For me, I prefer
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school`s
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the school`s
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 teaching
instead
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 of
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the home`s
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task response
Add clear points about why home schooling can be good and what its limits are. State one main idea per paragraph and link ideas with simple words.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea. Use simple links like 'also', 'but', 'so' to show how ideas go from one to the next.
content
Clear topic and a view on schooling.
structure
There is an intro and a closing part.
The Greeting

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Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized education
  • flexible schedule
  • bully-free environment
  • aligned with family values
  • socialization
  • hinder
  • diversity
  • significant pressure
  • structured learning
  • specialized teachers
  • extracurricular activities
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