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The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.

The table gives information on the proportion of
eaten fast
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fast food eaten
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food
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 in Melbourne. The
data
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 ‎is
categorized
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categorised
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 into five groups and is reported per
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units
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unit
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 in 2005, present, and the ‎anticipated
units
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 in 2025.‎
Overall
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,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fried chicken have been the most popular types of fast
food
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 from ‎‎2005 to the present.
On the other hand
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,
noodles
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 and fried
rice
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 have shown the least ‎consumption during the same period.
Additionally
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, it is expected that
this
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 classification ‎will remain unchanged by 2025. It is worth pointing out that the popularity of salad
is
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has
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 ‎
growing
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 during the whole period shown.‎ At the top of the table, hamburger, with 38
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units
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units,
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 is the most significant fast
food
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 ‎among individuals in Melbourne.
However
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, the
data
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 for
hamburger
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hamburgers
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show
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shows
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 a drop of two ‎
units
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 from 2005
,
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;
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 it is forecasted that
this
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 number will reach a
pick
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peak
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 of 51
units
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 in 2025. ‎Considering the exact
data
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 from 2005 and present, alongside
with
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the projected
data
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 for ‎‎2025, fried chicken shows a constant
rising
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rise
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 in consumed
units
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, ranging from 35
in
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units in
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 2005 ‎and 45
units
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 in 2025.
This
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 number shows a significant
increased
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increase
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 of ten and eight
units
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 ‎from 2005
and
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to and
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 present
respectively
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, respectively
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. Meanwhile, salad
which
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, which
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 was considered
as
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the least ‎
cosumed
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consumed
 fast
food
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 (five
units
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) in 2005, has grown by three times now, reaching
at
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15
units
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. ‎
According to
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predicts
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predictions
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,
until
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by
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 2025,
this
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 trend will grow dramatically, representing the ‎number of 41
units
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.‎
In contrast
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, fried
rice
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 and
noodles
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 are not as common as other fast foods among ‎Australians in Melbourne. The usage of these foods
have
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has
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 shown the rise of three
units
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 for ‎fried
rice
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 and two
units
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 for
noodles
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 from 2005, reaching
at
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nine
for
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units for
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 fried
rice
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 and
at
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eight ‎
for
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units for
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noodles
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. The forecasted
units
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 of these foods
shows
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show
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 that
the
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their
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 popularity
of
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them
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will ‎
remained
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remain
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 approximately unchanged, with an increase of just one unit for
noodles
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 by 2025. ‎

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, data, units, noodles, rice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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