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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the amount of
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household
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households
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 based on their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015 in the US.
Overall
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, every four years, the pattern of the first four income categories
were
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 similar, meanwhile the highest
category
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 was fluctuating. In 2007, almost 30
million
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household
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households
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 has more than 100,000 annual wage, and
was
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 the highest number out of all
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category
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categories
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,
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. Subsequently
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subsequently
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,
this
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category
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 slightly decreased in 2011,
then
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 increased significantly in 2011, with over
than
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32
million
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household
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households
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.
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, it can be clearly seen that the
second highest
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category
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 was the lowest in every year. Only less than 15
million
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 households were in
this
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category
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 in 2007 and 2011, and the highest was
on
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in
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 2015. Interestingly, the 50,000-74,999
category
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 has the exact same number of
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household
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households
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 throughout the period, around 20
million
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household
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households
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. The first and second lowest
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category
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categories
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 showed a slight difference in each year
and
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, and
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 both categories reached
its
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their
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 peak in 2011. In conclusion, each
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category's
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category
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 has
fluctuating
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a fluctuating
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amount
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number
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 of households throughout the period, except the middle
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category
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category,
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that
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which
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tend
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tends
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 to be stagnant.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, category, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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