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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates information about underground systems in New York,
London
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,
Tokyo
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, Paris, Mexico
City
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 and Beijing. In general, it is clearly seen that the most expensive metros are in
London
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, but they have the least amount of lines. New York has the longest railway, but
subways
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the subways
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 in
Tokyo
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 go
most
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 frequently. In more detail, Subways are located in New York
City
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,
Tokyo
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 and Beijing.
Moreover
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, NYC's Subway has 24 lines,
as well as
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 a whopping
of
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659 miles of total
lenght
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length
, compared to
Tokyo
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's and Beijing's Subways with 189 and 357 miles, respectively.
However
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, there are 3,6 billion annual journeys in Beijing,
therefore
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, more than twofold as
much
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many
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 as in
Tokyo
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.
Cost
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The cost
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 of
ticket
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a ticket
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are
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is
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 5 times more expensive
at
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in
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 NYC, rather than
Beijing
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in Beijing
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, standing at 2.50 US dollars.
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,
Loondon's
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London's
 Tube is the most expensive way of transport-$7.30 for a single ticket, in comparison, tickets in Mexico
City
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 cost $0,45.
London
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's railway is
also
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 significantly longer, 249 miles.
Although
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,
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 in Paris, there are more metro lines-16,
in contrast
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 with 11 in
London
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 and 12 in Mexico
City
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, tokyo, city with synonyms.
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