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The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom

The given line graph illustrates data on maximum
temperature
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 during a day in four countries, Auckland, Christchurch, Edinburgh, and London, over a year.
Overall
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,
although
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 the average daily
temperature
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 in two
cities
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 in the UK increased,
this
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 number for the other two
cities
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 in New Zealand decreased over the timescale. At the beginning of the period, the daily
temperature
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 for Edinburgh and London stood around 5 degrees of Celisuce.
Then
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 both continued to go up and exceeded that of other
cities
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 in May to reach their peaks in July. After that, there was a downward trend for both to finish at well over 5. Turning to other
cities
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,
this
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 number began at well under 25. There was an upward trend for both to reach 10 and 15 for Christchurch and Auckland, respectively.
While
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 the
temperature
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 for Auckland remained stable from July to August, the figure for Christchurch climbed up to finish at just over 20, which was almost the same for the two
cities
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at the end
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 of
period
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the period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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