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The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008.

The line graph compares the
unemployment
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rate
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 and the emigration
rate
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 in Ireland over a twenty-year
period
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 from 1988 to 2008.
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, both the
unemployment
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rate
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 and the number of people emigrating were at their highest levels at the beginning of the
period
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. In the following years, both figures declined considerably, despite some fluctuations, before rising again towards the end. In 1988, the
unemployment
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rate
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 stood at nearly 17%, the highest point shown on the graph. It
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 fell slightly to around 13% by 1990.
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, the
rate
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 continued to decrease steadily, reaching its lowest level of approximately 5% in 2002.
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 figure remained relatively stable until 2006, after which
unemployment
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 rose sharply, almost doubling to about 10% in 2008.
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, emigration figures showed more variation over the
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. In 1988, around 40,000 Irish citizens left the country.
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 number increased dramatically over the next two years, peaking at close to 70,000 in 1990, before experiencing a sharp decline. From 1992 onwards, the number of emigrants fluctuated between 20,000 and 40,000. The
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 ended with just over 40,000 people leaving Ireland in 2008

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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rate, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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