Many people think that mobile should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. Do you agree or disagree

There is a view that cell phones should be prohibited in public areas,
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some people consider it is good option, I personally believe it is not always a true option, as some people need to be connected to their jobs or offices. On the one hand, without having an electronic device in public
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shows the respectness for others.
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, in public transport that has any
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or calls, it cannot fully distract other passengers or take their focus in the transport.
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, the passengers can arrive at their destination in a good mood, as it can
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affect their emotional side.
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, there can be some opposite view that without having
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or calls, people cannot stay connected with their family, colleagues or with their job
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.
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, allowing mobile phones in public
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is important, as banning them can lead to anxiety, inconvenience, and serious problems in emergency situations.
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, there can be some disagreement without having electronic
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in public
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, these days using electronic
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is the most common , especially for workers, and there is no problem with having
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or using public
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, as they can be switched off in the silent part of mobile phones.
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, it can bring a lot of benefits for passengers in public and
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those who require
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in their lives too.
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, there can be one opposite view that it can disturb the owner of the mobile phone , and they can experience a lack of concentration , even if silent notifications can be reduced.
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, even when used in silent mode,
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can still distract users, reduce awareness, and negatively affect both safety and concentration in public
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.

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structure
You show both sides and a clear view.
coherence
You use on the one hand and on the other hand to show contrasts.
coherence
You have some good links between ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay โ€“ it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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