The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart gives information on
UAE
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the UAE
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government
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government's
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spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315
billion
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Firstly
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, the pie chart shows that they have 10 information about
wher
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where
the money goes and how much
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.
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first
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The first
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one
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is the blue
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sky,
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is health and personal social
service
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services
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like
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, like
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hopitals
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hospitals
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hospitals
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, it
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it
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cost AED 53
billion
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, at
color
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colour
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green olive shows the low and order cost
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of AED
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17
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Therdly
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, the red
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is education
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spend
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spending
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AED 22
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for schools and universities At the
oranfe
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is the
industr
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industrial
agriculture and employment
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,
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it
cost
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costs
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about AED 13
billion
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. And
the
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they
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have the blue is the defence Aed 22
billion
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, they have the purple
color
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colour
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was
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as
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the other expenditure
AED
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, AED
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23
billion
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. The green
one
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is the debt interest AED 23
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,
also
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the light green is housing
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, the
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heritage and
environement
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environment
AED 15
billion
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, before the
last
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one
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and the biggest is
pink
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pink,
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it was social security AED 100
billion
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, the
last
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one
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and the lowest is transport AED 9
billion
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to
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summarize
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summarise
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the information
the
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, the
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UAE government spend
to
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too
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much money
for
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on
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the
countrie
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country
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be
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provide
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a
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apply
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good quality
about
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apply
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the
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apply
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health and
eduction
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education
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, transportation
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also
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apply
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the
security and
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and security
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, it
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it
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which
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was
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is
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the most
importent
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important
and
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, and
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they spend a
big
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significant
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amount
for
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on
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the
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apply
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social security .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • government
  • spending
  • billions
  • social development
  • infrastructure
  • defense
  • security
  • healthcare
  • education
  • investment
  • citizen
  • focus
  • priority
  • sector
  • emphasis
  • facilities
  • transport
  • well-being
  • future
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