The diagram below shows the changes of a village in 1995 and now.

The map illustrates

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apply

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the

tranformation

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transformation

of a village into a town,

betwen

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between

1995 and

present

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the present

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time.

Overall

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, there are developments in the

accomodation

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accommodation

and farming sectors now. Land used for

fishing related

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fishing-related

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activities has been completely rebuilt into houses. The

greenlands

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green spaces

are now used for sports activities. The connecting roads have

also

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improved. The farmlands and the forest park present in 1995 in the north-east

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are

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now used by golf and tennis players.

Although

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the cafe hotel in the south-east area still stands the same, an additional car park

attached

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has been attached

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to the hotel. A significant

chang

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change

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was brought upon the fishing community in the south. The fishing market

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along

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, along

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with the

port

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port,

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was completely demolished and used for

extension

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the extension

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residing

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residential

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facilities

with

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, with

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no construction over the sea. Shops present opposite the shore

were

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are now owned by the restaurants. The housing to the west of the farmlands has two more residential compartments added to the

previouslt

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previously

built houses,

along with

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a connecting road for

convinience

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convenience

. A couple of more houses were constructed in the

north- west

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north-west

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, along the main road that connects the residential area to the

beach side

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beachside

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cafe.

Overall

Linking Words

, the village

Wrong verb form

has been

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turned

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into

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a more developed town with dedicated areas for sports and a better housing system.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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211 words

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