The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly.

The diagram illustrates
cyclic
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the cyclic
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process of
life
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the life
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of
Monarch
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the Monarch
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butterfly.
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,development from eggs
are
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is
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laid and
ended
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ends
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with migration to
south
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the south
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. A process of evolution consists of five stages.
At the first
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stage
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, it started from
migration
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migrating
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adult butterflies to
north
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the north
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and ended with producing eggs by mating. After, we can observe that they
storaged
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stored
eggs on the milkweed and after 14 days
newly
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, newly
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hatched
harva imerged
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larvae emerged
. At the second
stage
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, the newly hatched harva
starting
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starts
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to grow and transform into the
cartepillar
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caterpillar
. On the next
stage
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, demonstrated attachment of
larva
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the larva
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. As the evolution
starting
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starts
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occurring,
larva
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the larva
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turns into
crystalysis
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a crystal
. At the pupal
stage
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, after
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crystallisation
crystalysis
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crystalysis,
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young
butterfly
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butterflies
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starting
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start to
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appear.
Finally
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, adult
butterfly
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butterflies
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grow in size,
then
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turns
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turn
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into
an
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apply
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adult
butterfly
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butterflies
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and
ending
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end
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wiht migrationto
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with migration to
south
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the south
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. After that
cyclic
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, cyclic
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growth repeats itself over and over again, starting and ending with migration.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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