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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive o r negative situation?

In some
part
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parts
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 of
world
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the world
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 is very important to have a
house
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instead
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 of renting
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house
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a house
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.I think
this
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 is a
postive
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positive
 trend
i
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I
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 will discuss in the
folowing
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following
 statements.
Firstly
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, having a
house
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always
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is always
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consider
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considered
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 as a wealth and social status.Ownerships
always
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were always
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 treated specially and had more special privileges than
who
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those who
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have
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did
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 not.
As a result
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,
individulas
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individuals
was
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were
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 trying to buy
home
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homes
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earn
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to earn
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repect
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respect
 and special treatment.
Fox
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For
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 example,in some regions in
China
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China,
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 to commit marriage
men
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, men
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 should have
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an apartmen
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apartmen
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apartment
 or
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a prive
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prive
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private
house
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.
Secondly
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,owning
home
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a home
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 is a long-term investment. Property values increase over time and can make owners
wealth
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wealthy
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 after some period.
Additionally
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,having private homes can help individuals avoid wasting money and
some
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apply
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other
spending
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expenses
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. After
some
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a
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period
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period,
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 it can be
investment
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an investment
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 and
pass
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passed
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 to
next
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the next
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generations
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generation
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.
Moreover
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,having a
house
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guaranteed
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guarantees
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 emotional and financial stability and makes people feel
themselves
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apply
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safe and secure. In conclusion, having own property
generally
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is generally
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positive
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a positive
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 development. But it should not be
only
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the only
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 way to success. Renting houses
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also can
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can also
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 be practical in some circumstances.

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language
Fix many spelling mistakes and use simple, correct grammar.
structure
Plan your writing. Use one main idea per paragraph and add link words to move ideas.
content
Give more clear proof. Add facts or examples that fit your main points.
content
You show a clear view that owning a home can be good.
structure
There is a plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • own
  • own a home
  • buy
  • buy a house
  • rent
  • renting
  • home
  • house
  • security
  • stable
  • stability
  • future
  • family
  • kids
  • pride
  • status
  • money
  • price
  • cost
  • save
  • savings
  • loan
  • bank
  • pay
  • payment
  • job
  • work
  • move
  • area
  • neighborhood
  • tax
  • debt
  • policy
  • government
  • market
  • value
  • repair
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