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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

Recently, many married
couples
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 are planning not to have any
children
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.
This
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 idea could be beneficial because it reduces
life
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 expenses,
also
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 it increases
life
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 quality
couples
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 would live.
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, deciding not to have any
children
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 has a few drawbacks, like growing up alone and increasing the probability of getting divorced. On one hand,
child-free
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couples
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 manage to lower their
life
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 expenses dramatically,
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 is because they are not required to pay any child expenses, like university fees, which
costs
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 a lot of money.
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,
child-free
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couples
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 enjoy their
life
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 more than any other
couples
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,
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 the fact that they
reduced
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 the amount of distraction in their
life
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, since
children
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 can be the cause of many arguments the couple would consistently have, so now
without
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, without
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 any
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children
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children,
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 they can enjoy their
life
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 even more.
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, in Kuwait,
child-free
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couples
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 are
traveling
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travelling
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 more often than
the ones
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those
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 with
children
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, which indicates that they are having fun and financial freedom.
On the other hand
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, the primary disadvantage of not having any kids is growing up alone. Many
couples
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 feel the need to have a child when they are
old
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older
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, because
children
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 fill the emotional needs for
old
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older
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couples
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, like love and appreciation.
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,
couples
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 who decide to stay without
children
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 are more likely to divorce in
latter
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the latter
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 stage of their
life
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, since most
of
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the
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apply
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couples
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 choose to be
child-free
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 at
early
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the early
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 stage of their
marriage
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married
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life
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, but when they grow up and see what they missed, they have mixed feelings of regret and fear.
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, they can not continue to be married.
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,
couples
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 in the Middle East are often divorced when they reach the age of 40 and
not
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have not
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having
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had
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 any
children
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. In conclusion,
couples
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now are
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are now
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 deciding to be
child-free
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.
This
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 idea has multiple advantages, like being wealthy and enjoying
life
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. It
also
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 has a few disadvantages, like feeling lonely and
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increasing
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 the chance of getting divorced.

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task response
Make a clear plan in the intro. State your view and the points you will cover.
coherence
Use clear topic sentence in each paragraph. Put one main idea per paragraph.
grammar
Use simple, correct language. Avoid long and strange phrases. Check grammar.
examples
Give small, clear examples from real life that fit the point.
structure
Uses 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show both sides.
content
Tries to cover both sides and ends with a short conclusion.
language
Some use of local examples (Kuwait, Middle East).
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • childfree
  • personal freedom
  • financial stress
  • raising children
  • nurturing the relationship
  • societal pressure
  • stigma
  • support network
  • companionship
  • legacy
  • regret
  • intimate bond
  • norm
  • invest in experiences
  • close-knit
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