urban areas nowadays are witnessing obesity among children. What are the causes and solution of this problem acoording to you? Ang suggest some solutions.

Recent studies indicate that in many cities, more
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.
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we should study and fix. Because
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if we do not address
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, it can lead to devastating outcomes nobody wants.
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, in
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will point out the causes of
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particular
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and give
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a solution
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for each. We can start by stating the causes of
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there are too many
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food
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foods
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and sugary drinks available for the younger generation.
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, safe places for
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to play and
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are almost non-existence.
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, kids are moving less, sitting behind
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to the screen
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generally eating more. Another reason is busy parents, with busy
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comes less-healthy
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, fast
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and
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food
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. Another big issue is
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, big companies
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to attract
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to buy
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food
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. The solutions to our first cause
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programs created by the government to push healthy
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into schools and
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around younger people. Following
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better PE classes and sport competitions
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programs for them.
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, investing money in building safer places like parks,
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sidewalks
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,
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for
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and
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such
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can solve the third cause. And
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but not least, we have to teach families quick, easy and healthy meal ideas. Following
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taxes and limited
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on sugary drinks and
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food
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. In conclusion, with the help
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families,
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schools
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, cities, government, and
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themselves
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themselves,
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we can create
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better environment. These small steps are the most crucial and important because they lay the foundation of
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healthier lifestyle.

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structure
Plan the essay with a clear layout: intro, 2 body parts (causes and fixes), and a brief end.
language
Use short, clear sentences and careful grammar.
content
Give more full ideas for each fix, with examples that show how a school or city can act.
cohesion
Use simple link words to connect ideas: also, because, for example, in addition.
structure
The essay shows a simple plan with an intro, body and conclusion.
content
You state causes and ways to fix the issue, which fits the task.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • city
  • child
  • kids
  • children
  • weight
  • health
  • eat
  • food
  • drink
  • water
  • sugar
  • junk food
  • fast food
  • move
  • walk
  • run
  • play
  • sport
  • exercise
  • park
  • street
  • road
  • school
  • meal
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • home
  • family
  • mom
  • dad
  • parent
  • work
  • time
  • ads
  • advertising
  • money
  • tax
  • plan
  • change
  • problem
  • solution
  • safe
  • city life
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