The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar diagram depicts the
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visitors
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number
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of
visitors
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to three London Museums from 2007 to 2012
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, it can be seen that the highest
number
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of
visitors
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visited to National
gallery
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, which
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lowest
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the lowest
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number
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initially
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.
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, both
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the British
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Museum and
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the National
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gallery
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had higher numbers with
same
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the same
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figure
initially
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that remained steady by the end. In 2007,
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the British
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Museum started with well above 10
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millions
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million visitors
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number
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of visitor,
this
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figure decreased dramatically to around 5
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millions
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million
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until
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2010,
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then
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showed a slight increase to approximately 15
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millions
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million
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.
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, Victoria and Albert started at just under 15
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millions
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million
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visitors
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in 2007.
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it
then
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decreased dramatically
for
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over the period of 3 years
at
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to
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under 10
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millions
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million
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, it
then
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increased
moderatly
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moderately
to 10
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millions
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million
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by the end of the period. Starting the period at
slight
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above 5
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millions
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million
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visitors
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, Victoria and Albert Museum showed a dramatic increase in the
number
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of
visitors
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reaching
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peak
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a peak
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at
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of
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around 15
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millions
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million
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by the end.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, number, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • go up
  • decrease
  • fall
  • drop
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • rise steadily
  • fall gradually
  • stay the same
  • stay steady
  • peak
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more
  • less
  • compared with
  • in
  • over
  • the
  • period
  • year
  • between
  • across
  • pattern
  • trend
  • difference
  • overall
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