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The bar chart below provides information about the top ten rice producing countries in the world in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the top ten
countires
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countries
 that produce
rice
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 in the world in 2015.
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overall
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, it can be seen that China has the highest number of
production
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 followed by
india
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India
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,
while
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Japan
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 produced the lowest figure.
Indoneshia
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Indonesia
 and
Banglades
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Bangladesh
,
and
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apply
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Brazil and
Japan
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 had the same number of
production
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. The five countries
Japan
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, Brazil,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Buma
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Burma
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, and Thailand produced just well under 20,000
tons
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.
Similarly
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,
Japan
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 and Brazil had
similar
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a similar
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number
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amount
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 of
production
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 of around 10,000 but
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the Phillippines
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Phillippines
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Philippines
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, Bauma, and Thailand had around 20,000
tons
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 of
the
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apply
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rice
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production
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which
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, which
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 was double
amount
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the amount
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compare
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compared
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 to them. In Bangladesh and
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Indonesia
Indoneshia
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Indoneshia,
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 the
production
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 figure of
rice
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 was approximately 40,000
tons
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slightly
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, slightly
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 higher than that of the five
countires
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countries
.The
rice
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production
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 in
china
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China
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 had a higher figure compared
all
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to all
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 other countries
which
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, which
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 was around 140,000
tons
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whereas
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, whereas
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 India followed China with just above 100,00
tons
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 of
production
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, production, japan, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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