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Band 3

Some people think about the best way to improve road safety is to make vehicles driver take a test every year.To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people claim that the best way to improve road safety is to make vehicle drivers take a
test
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 annually for their driver's license. I disagree with
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 view because it costs a lot of money
,
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, there are
a
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apply
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better ways , like
to
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checking their
traffic
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violations
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 register.
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, the cost of
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yearly
tests
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 is expensive and leads to
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pressure for the
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 every year.
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 is because there are a large number in
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society who are making under the minimum wage
and
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, and
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 they are afraid of failing the
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, which is unfair for them.
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, many low-income drivers may struggle to pay for annual driving
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, and failing the
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 could prevent them from using their vehicles for work, which would lead to a negative effect on their livelihood.
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, there are
a
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better plans or ways to improve highway safety , like checking their
traffic
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violations
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 register.
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, if they found a
traffic
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violations
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 register, they can rehabilitate their license
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and they can give educational lessons and a stronger
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 , which helps to reduce the violators
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 the highways. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that the solution is to make
a
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annual
tests
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 because it is expensive and the are better solutions , like checking their
traffic
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violations
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 register.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • yearly
  • test
  • driver
  • skill
  • safe
  • risk
  • money
  • time
  • cost
  • day
  • driving
  • older
  • education
  • training
  • practice
  • rule
  • license
  • enforcement
  • design
  • road
  • car
  • plan
  • idea
  • agree
  • disagree
  • best
  • mix
  • help
  • catch
  • benefit
  • problem
  • think
  • view
  • relation
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