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The graph below shows the estimated number of cars manufactured in 4 countries between 2020 and 2035.

The line chart illustrates the predicted number of
cars
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 manufactured in four nations, namely
China
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, the UK, Japan, and the US, over the period from 2020 to 2035.
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, the UK, Japan, and the US experienced a downward trend,
whereas
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China
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 showed a minor increase over time. By the end of the period,
China
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 had
become
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produced
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 the most
cars
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produced
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among the four. The projected number in Japan began at around 350,000, which was followed by a slight growth
by
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of
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 approximately 20,000 in 2025.
This
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 figure declined to 100,000
at the end
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 of the period, which marked a significant decrease.
Moreover
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, the estimated
cars
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 being produced in the UK and the US started at 200,000 and 300,000, respectively. The number reduced steadily, and
thereafter
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 it hit a low of roughly 50,000 and 25,000 each by 2035.
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, the value of
cars
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 manufactured in
China
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 accounted for 100,000 in 2020 and edged up consistently to 150,000 in 2035.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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