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Band 1

1.1.part Zulayho You wont beleive what happened .I recently ordred new Laptop which is iconic around the world especialy my country but the courier delevred it to a neighbor who went to on a holiday .Finally I got this Laptop 2 week later .This Laptop condition very owfull and stop working .I beleive the campany must take full responsibilty and offer my funding .cheers .Dilnoza

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Introduction
1.2Part
Body paragraph 1
Dear customer service team
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I am writing to inform you about
issue
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watch
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the watch
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.When I
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firstly
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first
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buy
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bought
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this
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watch
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is
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but
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, but
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may be
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maybe
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week
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weeks
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 later
the
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, the
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watch
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compeletely
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completely
 stopped working
and
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, and
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 the
watch
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frozen
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froze
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.I
am
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have
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 tried changing the
watch
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 battery
but
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, but
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 it did not help
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. to
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to .l
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I
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 do not know why
this
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compeletely
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completely
 stopped working.At
first
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first,
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 when I
ordred
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ordered
this
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watch
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watch,
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wait
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waited for
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 a lot of day because the courier
delevred
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delivered
 it to a
neighbor
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neighbour
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 which is went to
Istanbul
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Istanbul,
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 where
loceted
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located
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a
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apply
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Turkey
as
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. As
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the
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a
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result
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result,
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this
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demeged
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damaged
l
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. l
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beleive
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believe
 your company
which
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, which
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 is
opened newly
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newly opened
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 and your service should take full
responsibilty
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responsibility
 and use
ather usefull
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another useful
method
if
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. If
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 you use
better
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a better
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 way and replace your
service
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service,
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be
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apply
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achive
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achieve
great
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a great
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 goal .Thank you
your
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for your
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 attention.
your
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Your
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soncerely
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sincerely

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structure
Make clear the goal of the letter. Say what you want at the end.
language
Use short, simple sentences. fix spelling and grammar.
organization
Put ideas in good order. use a simple plan before you write.
content
You start with a greeting and tell you write to tell about a problem.
content
You state the issue and what you did after it happened.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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