The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003.

The given chart is a figure revealing data about the number of cinema

visitors

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in Auckland, from 1995 to 2003, which is compared in 4 groups of age

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groups.

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Overall

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, the percentage of attendance increased during

this

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period

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while

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cinema

visitors

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at certain ages decreased.

Moreover

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, the people who are in

age

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the age

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groups experienced a downward trend. As the tables show, in 1996, the proportion of all people who preferred to go to the cinemas was 62%, and it increased in 1979 to 72%. After that, it remained unchanged at 72% until 1998.

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it experienced a fluctuation and saw 72% again by 2000.

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the number of frequent

visitors

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diminished during

this

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period

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to 8.3 in 2000. When it comes to

visitors

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who were a certain age, by 1996, all ages were in the lowest stage, between 10-15. In 1997 and 1999, they reached a peak, at 21 and 24, respectively.

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at the end

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of the

period

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, they had a decrease and saw the same number as they had at the start of the

period

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Dec 22, 2025

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, period with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

176 words

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The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003.

increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective?

Write a letter to your local council that the road in front of your house is damaged. In your letter, you should: tell him your name and where you are living describe the problem suggest what you want him to do for it.

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The wealth gap between 1st world countries and 3rd world countries seems to be increasing. How can we reduce this gap? Do you think that developed countries have a duty to assist developing countries in every way?