the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph gives information about the average
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dioxide
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emissions per individual in
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four different
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countries from 1967 to 2007.
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, it can be seen that
initially
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, the United Kingdom had the highest
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dioxide
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emissions per person and a slight decrease was seen over the whole time period,
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Portugal started at the lowest and rose dramatically by
last
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year. In 1967, average
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dioxide
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emission per individual in Portugal started at below 2 metric
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,
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this
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figure increased moderately to around 6 metric
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until 1997 and
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remained steady until
last
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year.
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, Italy started slightly above Portugal at around 4 metric tons per person and showed a similar pattern to the United Kingdom over the 30 years and reached approximately 8 metric tons, ending the period with the same value. Both Sweden and Portugal began at just above 8 metric
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and 10 metric
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, respectively. There was a slight decline seen in the average
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dioxide
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emission in the United Kingdom throughout the whole time period and ended at 8 metric
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per year,
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Sweden rose dramatically to over 10 metric
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tonnes
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after
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that
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started decreasing moderately with some fluctuation and reached below 6 metric
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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