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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the sales of various kinds of digital
games
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 worldwide in billions of
dollars
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 from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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, the whole sales increased significantly during the period , except for console
games
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 that dropped gradually.
Although
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 the sale of handheld
games
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 rose notably from 11
billion
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dollars
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 to almost 18
billion
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dollars
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, the amount of money earned from selling console
games
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 dropped steadily from 6
billion
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 in 2000 to 3
billion
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dollars
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at the end
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 of the period.
Additionally
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, mobile phone gaming was not available in 2000 and appeared in 2002 for the first time , with the sale of approximately 1
billion
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dollars
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 and
then
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 rocketed considerably to just above 6
billion
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dollars
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. Online
games
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 were introduced in 2001 and recorded sales of 0.5
billion
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dollars
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 in the following year.
Finally
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, it reached 9
billion
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dollars
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 in 2006.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words games, dollars, billion with synonyms.
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