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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and gie your own opinion.

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 is my opinion. Some people believe that professionals
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 as doctors and engineers should be required to
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 in the
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 where they received their training,
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 others argue that they should be free to
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 abroad. Those who support that specialist have to stay to
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 in the
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 where they had earn
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 argue that the government spend lots of money on
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. When trained people leave the
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, they lose their investment.
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 level of quality of medicine ,
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. But we know that
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 is not only free for everyone. Lots of countries are popular because of their high university
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. so
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, others have different views about
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. They believe that workers should have the freedom to choose places where they want to
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 and live. And I think the choice that where they live is really valued. Lots of people don’t like places where they earn an
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. So
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 could provide an uncomfortable living in
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 or city. For me personally, it’s a huge argument.
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, working abroad allows specialists to gain valuable international experience, develop new skills, and access better technology. In many cases, professionals later return home with improved knowledge, which can be more beneficial than staying in the
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 where they studied. In my opinion, professionals should not be forced to
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 in their training
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, governments should focus on improving salaries, working conditions, and career opportunities to encourage them to stay. Incentives are more effective than strict rules.

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task-structure
Plan your essay before writing. Start with a short sentence that says what you will discuss and your view.
coherence
Make the flow easy. Use clear links between ideas. Begin each paragraph with a clear idea and use words like first, also, but, however, so
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Give one or two strong example for each idea and explain why it matters.
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You show your own view in the last part.
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You try to show both sides.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homegrown expertise
  • return on investment
  • critical sectors
  • global exchange
  • career opportunities
  • international skill gaps
  • cultural understanding
  • diversity
  • balance
  • international exchange programs
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