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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people believe that governments should spend more money on public transportation than on building new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, governments spend
budget
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their budget
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 on
urbanization
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urbanisation
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 processes where establishing new
roads
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more
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is more
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 preferred than improving public
transportation
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. Many residents believe it is better to invest in public transport, rather than establishing new
roads
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. I, personally, agree with both of
views
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these views
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, where each of these plays a
curical
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crucial
 role in city
transportation
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. There are numerous reasons why governments should spend money on improving
roads
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 in the first place.
Firstly
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, if there
is
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are
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 no accessible
roads
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 for everyone,
traffic
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 has to be expected
and
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, and
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this
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 could lead to serious issues
throught
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throughout
 the city.
Secondly
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, improving
roads
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 and making
it
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them
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 more
customized
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customised
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 for public
transportation
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 makes the
passangers
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passengers
life
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lives
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 much easier.
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, adding bus lanes
,
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apply
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 has made
significant
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a significant
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 change in
traffic
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 and
people
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's lives.
This
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 improvement reduced the
traffic
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 and made
people
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's lives a lot easier,
while
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 tired
people
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 from work, used to
stand
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standing
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 in a bus which was
surroundend
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surrounded
 by
the
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apply
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traffic
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traffic,
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 could be very much of
torture
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a torture
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.
Finally
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, terraforming
has
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also has
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also
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 a lot of benefits for the buildings and surroundings of the
roads
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. As the importance of new
roads
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are
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is
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mentionned
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mentioned
 above,
that
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as
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 much
of
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apply
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attention should
be
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also be
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also
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 given to
the
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apply
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public
transportation
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.
Transportation
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such
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 as
tram
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trams
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,
bus
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buses
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 and subways are
in
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apply
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a
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apply
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primary usage
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primarily used
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of
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by
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 the residents. Dedicating some of the budget to these parts of
transportation
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,
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apply
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 would lead to a better
passanger
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passenger
 experience. Buses equipped with A/C could make dangerous hot days smoother and
increasing
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increase
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 the
amount
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number
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of
people
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 per one 1 vehicle who could travel.
Additionally
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, new
transportation
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 means new
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 buses / trams in cities, where new technological advancements
let
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make
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 the journey
be
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apply
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viable through
electricty
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electricity
 or other alternative energy. In conclusion, as
transportation
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 and new
roads
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 are important , I
belive
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believe
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 in
near
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the near
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 future
government
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the government
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 will be much attentive about it and the city development will
get into
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reach
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the
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a
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 point where everything runs
smooth
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smoothly
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.

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task response
Plan a clear view and stick to it. State your main stance in a strong line in the intro or at the end.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and end with a short wrap up. Use simple linking words like First, Also, Then, Finally.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Fix common errors like 'throughout' 'passengers' 'surrounded' and 'electricity'. Use plain, direct language.
content
Give a real change you would see if money goes to roads or transit. Use a small example for effect.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides and gives some examples.
content
There are some good ideas about how roads and public transport can help.
structure
The essay has an intended structure with an intro, body, and conclusion.
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