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In recent years more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages of ebooks outweigh their disadvantages?

Currently,
e-books
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 have become more popular than printed ones.
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 it is obvious that there are drawbacks to
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, I still believe that the benefits for environmental protection outweigh their disadvantages. It is noticeable that reading
e-books
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 could be harmful to the eyesight of children, and the device used to display
e-books
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 is always dependent on the power capacity. It is only visible on electronic devices
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 as an iPad, which consumes power
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 reading. It is inconvenient for the reader who is unable to charge their devices.
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, long-term reading with a screen has potential risk for the eyes, especially for children.
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, a student who enjoys reading, staying in front of the screen for a long time, is easier to become tired, which is unhealthy for their eyesight. It could be one of the reasons for the increasing number of glasses users among school-age children. Even though the advantages of
e-books
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 for environmental protection are still impressive. Because it brings a
paper
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-free mode for reading. It reduces the usage of
paper
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 to print books, which saves millions of trees to produce
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paper
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. It
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 reduces the pollution during
paper
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 production. Both are essential for the entire human being.
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, tons of
paper
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 are conserved by widely use of
e-books
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,
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 the CO2 emissions are reduced in the air.
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, those benefits definitely outweigh the drawbacks of
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. In conclusion,
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 there are drawbacks to
e-books
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, I still believe their advantages are greater than their disadvantages because of the positive effects on environmental protection.

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Structure
Plan a clear path: start with a short view, then add ideas that back it, and end with a clear end.
Coherence
Use linking words to move from one idea to another so the flow is smooth.
Content
Let each paragraph have one main idea and add one or two facts to back it up.
Language
Use plain words and fix small grammar errors.
Content
Give more exact facts, like numbers or proof that e books save trees.
Content
The text stays on topic from start to end.
Idea
It shows a view that e books can help the land.
Examples
There is at least one example about eye care.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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