the graph below gives the information about car ownership in great britain from 1971 to 2007

The given line graph illustrates percentages of
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possession in Great Britain
household
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, covering 38 years from 1971 to 2007 It is clearly seen that, from the beginning of the given
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, nearly half of the households did not own a
car
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at all.
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this
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trend drastically went down and corresponded with the figures for
families
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who own 2
cars
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.
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for
families
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with 1 and 2
cars
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had been slightly the same throughout the entire
period
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. In 1971, about 45% of
families
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owned at least one
car
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and half of the
families
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did not own any vehicle at all.
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, less than 3% of the
families
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had
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owned three or more
cars
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. Figures for
families
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with two
cars
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had
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started with 8% and saw a rapid increase throughout the given
period
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. By the end of the
period
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, Households that owned 2
cars
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had drastically increased and eventually surpassed figures for no
car
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,
making it
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nearly
at
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25%. Since the beginning, trends for households with no
cars
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have seen a significant decrease
where
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eventually it became less than 25%.
Families
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with 3 or more
cars
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have seen a gradual rise till the end of the
period
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. From the beginning, it continued to be very low till the year 1979,
where
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when
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the
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sudden change happened
and
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, and
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as the years go by,
this
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figure has only seen an upward trend.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, period, families, cars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • household
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • ownership
  • period
  • peak
  • dip
  • noteworthy
  • consistent
  • dramatic
  • highlight
  • significant
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