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Band 4.5

In modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work, and accomodate via the internet without face to face contact one another to. What extend do you think this is possitive or negative developement

Today's
developping
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developing
 world, through the
internet
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internet,
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 it is more
conveinient
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convenient
 for every single
activities
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activity
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, like
,
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apply
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 shopping,
work
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, and
accomadation
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accommodation
. Not only that, banking ,
and
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apply
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business ,
ect
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etc.
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, all
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all have
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have all
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 been gone in a very easiest way. Absolutely ,
this
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 platform can
extreamely
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extremely
posses
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possess
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 both positive and negative impact on people's
livestyles
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lifestyles
. There can be several benefits of
this
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 trend .
Firstly
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,
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buying
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 things
to
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for
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 a person for their needs and
access
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accessing
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varrieties
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varieties
are more
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is
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 easier than earlier without wasting their time. As an example, log on to the relevant websites and
by searching
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search for
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their essentialities. The public
have
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has
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the
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access to bring products to their doorsteps.
Moreover
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 ,
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work
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working
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 from home is very
poppular
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popular
in
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apply
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these days. During the
covid
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COVID-19
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 pandemic situation it was really hard to find manpower because social interaction was not allowed .
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the
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this
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 reason, most
of
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the
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employers start to get the manpower
by
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apply
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online and
intodrouce
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introduce
this
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 trend as
work
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 from home.
This
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 system is having
a
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the
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 biggest
convenient
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convenience
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 for company owners , and
this
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 has been a huge
cost effective
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cost-effective
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 method for them. Not only that, when travelling,
find
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finding
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 a place
for staying
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to stay
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,
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apply
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it
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apply
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is not a difficult
targrt
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task
for everyone. By searching them online and even
to do
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doing
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 the payments
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also
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, also
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not
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no
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a
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apply
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hesitation anymore. As an instance, Booking . com is very famous among these websites.
Eventhough
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Even
, there are possible drawbacks too on behalf of
this
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 advancement.
Firstly
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 ,as we discussed, online shopping is
more
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a more
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 convenient way
but
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, but
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 there are some
failiers
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failures
 in
real
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the real
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visualization
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visualisation
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 of the product.
However
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, sometimes people have
waisted
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wasted
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 money and time on that. As an example , especially
buy
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when buying
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clothes and shoes ,
mostely
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most of
 the sizes
not
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are not
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 compatible. Not only that, the real
visualization
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visualisation
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 is different
with
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from
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 the picture which is available
in
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on
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 the site.
Moreover
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,
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work
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working
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 from home
sometimes can
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can sometimes
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 be a distraction for employees ,because
,
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apply
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they have to
get
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manage it with their personal problems. Their kids must be some distractions
and
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, and
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 they must be
loosing
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losing
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 their concentration on
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this
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these
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 issues.
To conclude
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,
In
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in
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 modern
soceity
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society
, online is
a
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apply
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one of the main major powerful systems, and everything
could
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can
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 be very easy
in
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with
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one
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a
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 finger tap.
However
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, there are many negative and positive
impact
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impacts
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 on them.
Finally
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, people should be very intelligent when they use the internet, and
to
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be very careful by dealing with
this
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 advancement.

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task response
Make a clear plan. Say your view in the first line and end with a short ending that repeat your view.
structure
Divide the essay into four parts: intro, two or three body paragraphs, conclusion. Each part has one idea.
coherence
Use small link words to show order and contrast, like first, also, but, so.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use simple, correct sentence forms.
scope
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
evidence
Real examples are used, like Covid and a travel site.
structure
There is a short end line that wraps up.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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