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The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map illustrates the design of a factory and
residental
Correct your spelling
residential
 area for workers.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the plan for
construction
Correct article usage
the construction
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 of industrial
areas
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 is considered in the middle of the city,
while
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 housing
areas
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 are away from the centre.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 the north part of the scheme,there are housing
areas
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both
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in both
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 northern west and and northern
east
Correct word choice
northeastern
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part
Fix the agreement mistake
parts
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 of the map.Housing
areas
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 which close to parking
is consisted
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consist
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 of four apartments, and it is about next to
office
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the office
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the distance between
industrial
Correct article usage
the industrial
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areas
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 and
housing
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the housing
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 is not long.
Swimming
Correct article usage
The swimming
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 pool is below
housing
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the housing
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areas
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 in the
eastrean
Correct your spelling
eastern
 part of
north
Correct article usage
the north
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. There are 5 homes in the corner of the map, accurately
in
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on
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 the west side of
south
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the south
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.It is noticeable that three industrial
areas
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 are located both in the middle of the area and in the
southern east
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southeastern
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 area.
Meeting
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The meeting
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 room is near industrial
areas
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 situated in the centre.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • factory complex
  • housing area
  • infrastructure
  • transportation links
  • amenities
  • environmental sustainability
  • residential buildings
  • communal facilities
  • work-life balance
  • industrial development
  • urban planning
  • green spaces
  • employee accommodation
  • accessibility
  • layout
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