The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

The given chart illustrates the changes in different means of transportation in Britain. The data covers average commuting distance by eight modes of transportation, and two separate years, namely 1985 and 2000.
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, the car was the most popular mode in both years,
while
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the taxi remained the least
utilized
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vehicle, despite experiencing dramatic growth. At first glance, in the initial year, cars were the predominant vehicle (3199
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per person per year), followed by other modes of travel at 450
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, and local
buses
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at 429
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. The figures for the remaining five categories ranged from 13
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for taxis to 289
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for trains. After 15 years, it can be found that the distances for walking, bicycles, local
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, long distance
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dropped to different extents. In stark contrast, British inhabitants relied more on private cars, long-distance
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, taxis and other vehicles. Taking a closer look, walking and riding bicycles did not witness dramatic changes, falling slightly from 255
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to 237
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from 51
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to 41
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, respectively. Private vehicles,
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, saw the most marked increase, soaring from nearly 3199
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to 4806
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.
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, the period witnessed the biggest
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in local
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, declining by nearly 50%. In summary, the total commuting distance rose significantly over the period. Notably, without private cars, the dominant means of transport, citizens in England would not have enjoyed
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convenience and flexibility in commuting./ Notably,
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growth was overwhelmingly driven by car use.
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, most public modes of transport recorded a noticeable downward trend.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words miles, buses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • car
  • bus
  • train
  • bike
  • walk
  • travel
  • people
  • number
  • part
  • share
  • rate
  • period
  • England
  • 1985
  • 2000
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • go up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • go down
  • change
  • trend
  • up
  • down
  • more
  • less
  • big
  • small
  • high
  • low
  • time
  • year
  • period
  • because
  • so
  • and
  • but
  • while
  • with
  • in
  • on
  • by
  • than
  • than
  • than
  • a lot
  • a little
  • over
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